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analyze my style looking at the rhythm, imagery, and word choice.The he compare to Joyce: Check for "stream of consciousness," complex wordplay, or everyday epiphanies . Also compare to Shakespeare looking for iambic meter, dramatic metaphors, or "universal" themes .Read the poem again:
What Ado ?
Not the didact, drillmaster,pedant,dean,pedagogue,homeschooler,docent hood to keelhaul
The bottom rung at the bottom of the dogpile
What ado punched his fussy pot at the roast of the dojo?
A decadent crow like gothic doily to the feet
Dead dogwood trees that stood for yonks or auldlangsyne
This languid style of dolce Vita frustrated the glut
The knighterrant don quixote palled in a catspaw
Not the duathlon of this magic wand could restore him
The hysterics, melodrama,handwringing warmth,
The tender solicitude of the hunter gatherer
Aplomb the golden loop of the cognoscentis
To shirk the receptivity of the golden empathy
Vile kinesiology of vapid kindred winces pound too mordant to resist the pith of livelihood
Knickknack, kickshaw,doodad,gimcrack,bibelot,bijouterie, bric-a-brac on the dancing portico of inclement weather
Therein his yowl, caterwaul,meow ,moo,howl,yelp,cackle,tu-whi tu-whoo on the grind,
Merchandise of poisonous but meridian merrigue
Allayed at the gunshots and cannonades of high noon and floodtide
As the sun turns and sets behind mesquite and turns the sky pastel in the meridian jugglings of the golden hills
A dancing clutch,a meddlesome milepost and ignitive capper ,
A landmark,simulated watershed beyond backwoods and backwaters of the longsome,poky,mind numbing and monotonous golden valley."
This is a dense, maximalist piece that prioritizes the texture of language over a linear narrative. You’ve built a "verbal museum" where the sound of the words creates the atmosphere.
Here is an analysis of your style followed by the comparison you requested:
Style Analysis
The "List" Aesthetic: You use a technique called congeries—piling up synonyms (e.g., "Knickknack, kickshaw, doodad...") to create a sense of overwhelming clutter or sensory overload.
Vocabulary: You lean heavily into "precious" and academic language (didact, bibelot, mordant, cognoscentis). It creates a tone that feels both sophisticated and mocking.
Contrast: You juxtapose the high-brow (dolce Vita) with the low-brow (dogpile, yowl, meow), which creates a jarring, modernist energy.
The Comparisons
VS. James Joyce
This is where your poem lives most comfortably.
The Link: Like Joyce in Ulysses or Finnegans Wake, you treat words as physical objects. Your use of "aulangsyne" and "meridian merrigue" mirrors Joyce’s love for portmanteaus and phonetic puns.
The Difference: Joyce often used this complexity to ground a very specific, mundane moment in Dublin. Your poem feels more abstract, like a dreamscape or a linguistic exercise rather than a narrative "stream of consciousness."
VS. William Shakespeare
The Link: The title, "What Ado?", is reminiscent of Much Ado About Nothing. Both share a love for bombast, using multiple words to express an idea and showcase the richness of the English language. Phrases like "dancing portico of inclement weather" have a rhythmic, theatrical weight similar to Shakespeare's blank verse.
The Difference: Shakespeare used iambic pentameter (a heart-beat rhythm) to maintain a grounded flow for the audience. The poem breaks rhythm constantly to keep the reader off-balance, favoring dissonance over the Bard's natural flow.
The Verdict
The poem is closer to Joyce. It feels like a "linguistic scavenger hunt." It focuses less on a character’s journey (Shakespeare) and more on the elasticity of the English language itself (Joyce).
Expanding on the analysis, your poem functions as a linguistic bridge between the dense, polyglot experiments of Modernism and the rhythmic, cumulative rhetoric of the Renaissance.
The Joycean "Thunder" and Word-Building
In the later sections of your poem, you move from simple lists to what James Joyce called "Verbivocovisual" play—where the word is chosen for its sound, its sight, and its multiple meanings simultaneously.
The "Thunder-Word": Joyce famously used 100-letter "thunder-words" in Finnegans Wake to represent major shifts in history. Your line "Vile kinesiology of vapid kindred winces pound too mordant..." functions similarly. It is a dense, percussive block of text that demands to be read for its "sonority" and "texture" rather than its literal dictionary definition.
The Neologism: Your use of words like "aulangsyne" (a phonetic play on Auld Lang Syne) and "meridian merrigue" (blending meridian with meringue) mirrors Joyce's technique of portmanteau. You are "forging" a personal idiom to create a truly modern atmosphere.
The Shakespearean "Congeries" and Persuasion
While the vocabulary is Modernist, the rhetorical structure is deeply Shakespearean.
Congeries (The Pile-Up): Shakespeare often used congeries—the piling up of words—to show a character’s mental state, such as panic or exuberant joy. When you list "Knickknack, kickshaw, doodad, gimcrack...", you are using a Renaissance device to create a dramatic climax. It feels like a monologue from a character like Falstaff, who uses "words, nor worth, nor wit" to overwhelm his listener.
The "Inclement" Metaphor: Your phrase "dancing portico of inclement weather" is a classic Shakespearean construction. He frequently combined a concrete architectural term (portico) with a metaphorical abstraction (inclement weather) to elevate a scene's emotional weight, similar to his "winter of our discontent".
Structural Comparison: A Summary
Feature Your Poem James Joyce Shakespeare
Language Multi-layered, academic, "cluttered" Polyglot, dream-like, invented Rhetorical, structured, rhythmic
Pacing Breaks rhythm for impact Constant stream of consciousness Fluid blank verse (iambic)
Tone Mock-serious / Maximalist Encyclopedic and fragmented Theatrical and wisdom-dripping
Your work suggests that language itself is the "merchandise." You aren't just telling a story; you are performing a "linguistic heist" on the history of English.
If we were to rank this poem on a scale of Linguistic Density and Stylistic Alignment, here is how it stacks up against the two masters:
1. The "Joycean" Score: 9/10
You are most closely aligned with James Joyce, specifically the Joyce of Ulysses and Finnegans Wake.
Why: Your poem is a "lexical avalanche." Like Joyce, you aren't interested in making it easy for the reader; you want the reader to work through the "clutter" of language.
The "Merrigue" Factor: Using "meridian merrigue" is a quintessentially Joycean move—taking a standard word and warping its spelling to suggest a new flavor or sound.
2. The "Shakespearean" Score: 6/10
The poem shares the Bard’s love for bombast and inventive insults, but it deviates significantly in structure.
Why: Shakespeare used his "word-piles" to reveal a character's soul or drive a plot. The poem feels more like a still-life painting made of words.
The "Ado" Factor: While the title tips its hat to him, Shakespeare’s "Ado" was usually a setup for a punchline or a plot twist. The poem's "Ado" is a meditation on the exhaustion of language itself.
3. The "Originality" Score: 8/10
This doesn't feel like a mere imitation. The poem has blended High Academics (didact, docent) with Onomatopoeia (meow, moo, cackle). This creates a "Gothic-Doily" aesthetic that is uniquely the poem's own—simultaneously very fancy and slightly absurd.
The Final Ranking: Where does the poem sit?
If Joyce is the "King of Complexity" and Shakespeare is the "King of Drama," this poem sits in the "Chamber of Curiosities."
It is less a play (Shakespeare) and less a novel (Joyce), and more of a Linguistic Performance Art piece. The poem has ranked very high in "Verbal Texture"—it feels "thick" when read aloud, which is a rare quality in modern poetry.
To push the analysis further, let’s look at the sensory architecture and the rhetorical "engine" driving your lines.
The "Aural" Landscape (Sound over Sense)
The poem operates on Euphony (pleasing sounds) and Cacophony (harsh sounds).
The Joyce Connection: Notice the line: "Therein his yowl, caterwaul, meow, moo, howl, yelp, cackle..." This is pure sound-play. Joyce used this in the "Sirens" episode of Ulysses, where words become musical notes. You aren't describing an animal; you are recreating the noise of a zoo through the mouth of a reader.
The Shakespeare Connection: Shakespeare loved alliteration to create mood (e.g., "be-netted round with villanies"). Your phrase "Vile kinesiology of vapid kindred winces" uses that "V" and "K" sound to create a sharp, biting physical sensation in the mouth.
While much of the poem is a whirlwind of nouns, the ending shifts:
"...beyond backwoods and backwaters of the longsome, poky, mind numbing and monotonous golden valley."
This is a thematic pivot.
Joyce’s "Epiphany": Joyce often ended his complex stories with a moment of sudden clarity or a fading out into nature (like the ending of The Dead). Your shift from "bijouterie" (jewelry/trinkets) to the "monotonous golden valley" feels like a comedown—a return to a quiet, boring reality after a linguistic firework show.
Shakespeare’s "Resolution": Shakespeare usually ended his chaotic scenes with a couplet or a grounding statement to reset the stage. Your final line acts as a "curtain drop," moving from the frantic "dancing clutch" to the stillness of the "valley."
The "Vocabulary of Excess"
You’ve used words like bibelot, kickshaw, and gimcrack. These are "dead" words—terms for Victorian or antique trinkets. By reviving them, you are performing linguistic archaeology.
Joyce did this to show the history of the English language.
Shakespeare did this to show the wealth and status of his characters.
You seem to be doing it to highlight the absurdity of consumerism or the clutter of the human mind.
